Peer Review 11a for Emily Bond

This is my first peer review for production week. It was helpful to view other classmates’ work and compare it to my own.

1. The name of the title and author for the project you reviewed 

• Emily Bond (Section 8)
• Production Report 11a

2. A working hyperlink to the project you reviewed 

• http://emily109h.blogspot.com/2016/04/production-report-11a.html?showComment=1460259700967#c16539154585025385

3. An explanation of the peer review activity you selected for the project you reviewed 

• I peer reviewed Emily’s production report of the second body section from her outline. The outline is an organization of the different sections included in the project. Emily made raw material for her second body section that included sources and used rhetorical situations to support her argument.

4. An explanation of how you think you helped the author with your feedback (in other words, how did you help them make their work better?) 

• I helped her by commenting on her raw material and telling her what she should add. I told her she needed to explain what Michelle Obama’s Let’s Move! campaign was earlier on in her paragraph. I also told her every thing could be elaborated and more detailed and she could connect with the audience better by using the rhetorical situations.

5. An explanation of how you incorporated something from the suggested Student’s Guide readings (or any other course materials, if you’d prefer) into your feedback 

• The Student’s Guide states how it is important to use specific quotes and sources, which I told Emily to include more of.

6. One thing about their work that you admired or think you could learn from

• I admired how she explained what the five pillars of the campaign were and how she started of the paragraph.